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Danny133

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Its by no means anywhere near complete so the content isnt really judgeable however im looking for feedback on

a) colouring
b) layout and simplicity (ease of naviagation)
c) style
d) header image

I took initial feedback and removed my flash site and started building a proper one from scratch. I am no web developer but i have completely transformed the clikpic site into my own and pretty much customised every setting although every time i look i want to change something.

www.danielnewmanphoto.co.uk
 
First thing I noticed on the front page was "i" instead of "I". Other bits have "ill" and "Ill" where you mean "I'll" aswell.

I'm still having a perusal.
 
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It's looking good, but the English you use doesn't seem natural, I can't really help with improving that as I have the same trouble when I write stuff.
 
layout and navigation are nice, spacing and composition are good, gallery is empty (as I'm sure you know) so can't comment on that. Logo isn't to my taste and might look a little bit busy, just my opinion though.

And I agree with redddragon that you need to proof read your text and sort out those typos.
 
i struggle with english alot and am dyslexic hence the ask for help :)

but im trying hard lol im correcting bits as you point them out!
 
Danny,

So far it's heading in the right direction!
A few things I would comment on are -

The heading - the blue swirly font does nothing to me and is more akin to what kids would do. Personally I liked your last font you used, in blue it was rather striking.

Flash - you say you have removed flash however at my work your main page picture will not load due to my PC lacking Adobe flash player 10.2. This could also be the case for other people and prospective customers!

Pricing & delivery - in the last paragraphy you quote this " Postage within the UK is included in all prices, yet international orders may require additional postage costs to be paid via a secure PayPal invoice"
I would remove the word yet.

Otherwise keep up the good work!
 
stupar said:
Danny,

So far it's heading in the right direction!
A few things I would comment on are -

The heading - the blue swirly font does nothing to me and is more akin to what kids would do. Personally I liked your last font you used, in blue it was rather striking.

Flash - you say you have removed flash however at my work your main page picture will not load due to my PC lacking Adobe flash player 10.2. This could also be the case for other people and prospective customers!

Pricing & delivery - in the last paragraphy you quote this " Postage within the UK is included in all prices, yet international orders may require additional postage costs to be paid via a secure PayPal invoice"
I would remove the word yet.

Otherwise keep up the good work!
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Thank you! - shouldnt be flash at all though mate so im stumped on the adobe thing!?

Header - hmm i agree but struggling for alternatives! Will keep trying ..

Will edit the pricing bit now ..
 
My passion is photography and i love being able to capture the moment and create art. I have such a love for taking pictures and i hope that by looking at my photos you get the the same enjoyment out of them as i do taking them.

Please navigate to my gallery where you will be able to browse through my images and purchase if you find one you like.
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I would perhaps reword slightly along these lines...

Photography is my passion and I love being able to capture the moment and create art. I hope that by looking at my pictures, you'll feel the same sense of enjoyment that I do when taking them.

Please navigate to my gallery where you will be able to browse through my images and purchase them if you like.
 
Danny133 said:
Thank you! - shouldnt be flash at all though mate so im stumped on the adobe thing!?

Header - hmm i agree but struggling for alternatives! Will keep trying ..

Will edit the pricing bit now ..
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Good stuff.

Re the header, does clikpic only have a limited range of font's or does it pic the font's you have installed on your PC?

If its the latter search google for free font's (literally thousands of them)
and install some nice ones that you like and look better.

If its a clikpic font thing then I would revert back to your last font used, it looked miles better!
 
stupar said:
Good stuff.

Re the header, does clikpic only have a limited range of font's or does it pic the font's you have installed on your PC?

If its the latter search google for free font's (literally thousands of them)
and install some nice ones that you like and look better.

If its a clikpic font thing then I would revert back to your last font used, it looked miles better!
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its not a clikpic thing mate .. they give you arial

its a font i found on google and downloaded then made it in photoshop

i cant seem to find a font thats striking enough not to be boring and plain yet proffessional enough not to be childish. its striking that balance.
 
Have you tried dafont.com
That's where i get all mine from, plenty to choose from.
 
it wasnt lifted lol

i just didnt write it no i agree .. i bodged it and somebody else rewrote it.

And my gallery options have just been removed it does match im just trying to find a way to include them in the gallery as thats the bit thats prooving difficult
 
Ok, my bad.

(I deleted straight after posting, before you replied, as I decided it wasn't my best comment)
 
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no its not its good .. if you think it so will others so i need to have the rest written properly to match

thank you
 
OK, I've scooted past all the other comments until I've made mine.

Here are my thoughts in the order they happen;

1) The logo is horrific and not in keeping with the site, consider complete redo.
2) Simple layout is very appealing.
3) Tagline "Sharing The Moments Together" is cheesy, but I like it.
4) The cat. Are you mostly going to be selling picture of cats? If so, it's fine as a front page image. If not, remove it.
5) The page title for your home page should be the site name, not the tagline.
6) Main logo should redirect to the home page

OK, so that's what I think about the home page. I won't go any further :P

On the whole, it's good. It just needs a few tweaks.
 
BarryG said:
OK, I've scooted past all the other comments until I've made mine.

Here are my thoughts in the order they happen;

1) The logo is horrific and not in keeping with the site, consider complete redo.
2) Simple layout is very appealing.
3) Tagline "Sharing The Moments Together" is cheesy, but I like it.
4) The cat. Are you mostly going to be selling picture of cats? If so, it's fine as a front page image. If not, remove it.
5) The page title for your home page should be the site name, not the tagline.
6) Main logo should redirect to the home page

OK, so that's what I think about the home page. I won't go any further :P

On the whole, it's good. It just needs a few tweaks.
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1) Concidered and okay i agree so yep
2) Thank you
3) I needed something and am very open to suggestions
4) I will remove this - just wnated something to determine the size of the image box
5) Im unable to change this mate - whatever the tagline is is the pagname
6) Good point ill see if im able to do that! - not sure.

And no please do go further - its this that makes me mess around until i get it right
 
stupar said:
Danny,
Flash - you say you have removed flash however at my work your main page picture will not load due to my PC lacking Adobe flash player 10.2. This could also be the case for other people and prospective customers!
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There is still some code that needs to come out;

<noscript>
<p><strong>Please install Flash and turn on JavaScript.</strong></p>
<p><a href="http://www.adobe.com/go/getflashplayer"><img src="http://www.adobe.com/images/shared/download_buttons/get_adobe_flash_player.png" width="158" height="39" alt="Get Adobe Flash Player"></a></p>
</noscript>
 
How are you uploading? Through an FTP?

If so, just open each page with notepad and remove the above code.

Then FTP the new pages up. No need to do the images, just the html docs.
 
Looks like nice and simple Dan, you need some more pics though! Also, try and get some help (from here?!? lol ) with the text- try not to start every sentence "I am.." "I have.." etc.

Finding this really useful thanks as about to set up my own clikpic site!

P.S. slightly dissapointed that no arguments have started on this thread yet! :D The others have really cheered me up!
 
im messing around with homepage atm but clikpic support are making changes also so i hope the cat will be gone and ill have a panoramic soon .. he says
 
The only think I really dislike is the logo, other than that mate it looks really professional, nice one!
 
ive wacked that logo off and replaced it with a temporary one as people seem to hate it :P
 
Looking much better.......now time for some work to fill your gallery!
 
It may just be me but I think the box with your prices in would look better if it was in the middle rather than to the left, and maybe dropped down a line to separate it. Otherwise looks really good.
 
darwinws said:
It may just be me but I think the box with your prices in would look better if it was in the middle rather than to the left, and maybe dropped down a line to separate it. Otherwise looks really good.
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thanks mate - yes im doing the pricing box as we speak so havnt centered it yet :)
 
Do you have the web pages saved on your laptop/desktop?

If so, you can just right click and open with notepad. There you will see all the code.

It looks scary, but it all makes sense if you break it down.
 
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