, but I do quite like it as is. I decided to leave the tiara out of this composition as it just didn't feel right, and looked out of place. A slightly different style of processing on it this time, as I wanted to concentrate on the flower aspect, but still wanted to include the globe. I have to say I think I do prefer this version now. So here we go
The composition of the second shot is better, but it doesn't look as sharp as the first.
I'd also not bother with the selective colour, the background is plain enough and the loss of colour half way down the ribbon looks odd to me.
I love the idea of wooden flowers.
Subject matter is great.
But there is too much dead space on top and below the subject on the edit. The colour to B&W transition is distracting, as to are the creases on the backdrop.
If I may suggest, a clean white background such as photocopier paper, and move the ornament straight down to make it foreground interest and a lead in to the flowers, and crop the top off.
Rgds
Adie

Wonderful!Much better already (IMHO)
Adie
I think Adie managed to identify more usefully why I felt the colours were off. I much prefer that last shot :thmbs:


Hi Michael,
Before I have have got around to commenting on your first shot of the wooden flowers, you have re-edited twice and totally negated any issues I might have had with the first two attempts. From the very first one I was taken with the colours of the flowers and can now appreciate them more without the distractions. Great work - got there in the end hey.
I admire your ability to take the comments on board and re-do . I must admit I tend take the comments on board but just try to remember them for next time rather than getting down to correcting everything.
Nicely done![]()

Full colour version is better
...interest 
Twisted #1 A good idea but I'm not sure that it's worked. I think it needs more dramatic lighting to emphasise the texture of the plaits. As an image it fulfils the theme in that the strands are twisted but it lacks......interest
Twisted #2 made me smileA number of twists with a bit of interest in their congruity
Maybe you should have taken image from on the floor rather than over the top?
Hiya Michael,
Both on theme and I agree with Tina's comments.
#1 would have perhaps looked better without the green between ... maybe fill the frame with the plaits and take it from a low angle to create some dof, and also have the image portrait so the the plaits lead the eye in (rather than left to right).
#2 I like this fun idea. Here again I would have perhaps positioned the subjects in the grass (especially the idea of a snake in the grass). I would have also tucked away the label of the snake. Not sure if I would have included Peppa Pig (can you slide it off the straw?).
Good thought process though.
Cheers
Dawn![]()
Hi mike
Dawn and Tina have covered the crit very well. I dont think the first idea is worth pursuing further but there is big potential with the items you have... that shot just needs more thought...
Thanks a lot Michael, I now have the Pepper Pig theme in my head :bang:
It's all been said really.
#1 with some DOF may be better - is it rope or wool?
#2 is fun and made me smile, I'll boot up iTunes and shift Paper out of my head.
Pepper Pig.....never watched that....
I looked at these this morning and thought I'd commented.
First thing I saw on #1 was the grass at the bottom, especially the prominent, cut blade and also the red dot in the top right third.
Perhaps a photograph of one piece, focusing along it?
Regards.
Anyway, Peppa is stuck onto the straw, so she may well star again. With regards to the angle, I will give it ago from lower down and see what it looks like.





Hiya Michael,
I like your moon shot, it has some good detail. I agree a more square crop could work better.
I'm trying to see what is hidden in your first shot .... or is that the whole idea ... i.e., it is hidden?
Cheers
Dawn![]()