Yet another plea for advice/help

[Mojo Jojo]

Hey guys, took on a disposable at glasto. This is a link to the orginal, i know it has potential lol. i've been messing but havent quite got there yet.
Any constructive advice would be nice, and feel free to have an attempt.

Much love.

http://i291.photobucket.com/albums/ll301/jochristian_2008/CNV00027.jpg

 

[Jamougha]

Not that happy with this but I think it's an improvement.

http://img117.imageshack.us/img117/7919/glastose1.jpg

Needs someone who's seriously good with noise.

 

[davidbridges]

erm, i really like it how it is.

Got a nice feel to it