Would love some critique on my site

Complete lack of info on the front page.. its hard to tell if you are even in business and want customers... theres no indication as to what country your in.. people have to go looking for information about who/where you are.. needs more info front page... most important that your actually in the uk/england and not australia/america or? next is that you want clients... oloks like a hobby page at first glance and could be anywhere in the world..

people wont look for info.. you ahve to present it to them :)
 
KIPAX said:
Complete lack of info on the front page.. its hard to tell if you are even in business and want customers... theres no indication as to what country your in.. people have to go looking for information about who/where you are.. needs more info front page... most important that your actually in the uk/england and not australia/america or? next is that you want clients... oloks like a hobby page at first glance and could be anywhere in the world..

people wont look for info.. you ahve to present it to them :)
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Noted :)
 
Hi Jordon..What I don't like, and it's not just your site, is that the home page or landing page is different to the rest of the site, this is the reason I moved to the host I'm with now. Your home page is soooo different it could almost be two sites! hope you don't find that too critical but it's a pet hate of mine

Robin
 
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Initial feedback.
Clicked on the Street photography tab off the home page.
Then clicked on the "The British Workforce" and it says This page is locked And asks for a password !
 
robinchun said:
Hi Jordon..What I don't like, and it's not just your site, is that the home page or landing page is different to the rest of the site, this is the reason I moved to the host I'm with now. Your home page is soooo different it could almost be two sites! hope you don't find that too critical but it's a pet hate of mine

Robin
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What do you mean by different?

NikonKev said:
Initial feedback.
Clicked on the Street photography tab off the home page.
Then clicked on the "The British Workforce" and it says This page is locked And asks for a password !
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Because it's not public yet, will add a popup explaining that :)
 
Jordon..as I said your home page or landing page is a different template to the rest of the site ..fonts, colour, lay out, full screen to not full screen..my feeling is that it should be the same coherent theme throughout

Robin
 
The quote from GBS is amusing, but not I'd have thought a very good endorsement if you're trying to sell yourself as a photographer!

You need a proofreader. Textual mistakes sow seeds of doubt that incompetence may be across the board ... if you want business you need to instill confidence.

It has a nice, clean look.
 
Edit: Really not sure what the site is about or why it is there.
 
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Hi, I'm not in business as a photographer, this is perhaps from a customers point of view. First impressions were good lovely shot of a girl, nice sharp eyes shallow dof. I would certainly be happy with that kind of picture on my wall. After that, a little confusing. Not sure why you have a tab for street photography as the first one? I understand it being a passion, but not something to sell? Also, have to agree with previous comments around having to find what you do and trawl the site and grammar check. I am by no means an expert (just look at my posts) however "who loves that they do", it's a typo, however attention to detail matters. Especially if you want people to spend money with you. Finally not really sure about the assortment photo's section, looks more like your Flickr page as opposed to this is what I do, come and spend money with me. Apologies for the long winded post, on the positive side however, your photo's look good, in my humble opinion your website doesn't sell 'you' at this stage.
 
First thing I notice. Its hard to tell what you do. Is this page for fun/portfolio/to sell yourself to customers? it needs to be clear.

Landing page: little girl has the bottom of her face cut off and no way to scroll down. the menu is also very hard to see. Image is pretty flat and doesnt engage you.
Street photography: clicked on it - no pictures. Clicked on what I assume to be a thumbnail and i get a 'Coming soon' page, wheres the pics?
Menu bar also jumps about, not good for the user (e.g. on the front page its 2/3 of th way down. On every other page its at the top)
Portraits: looks fine and works good. Good pictures. Could maybe be doing with showing them bigger once they are clicked from within each individual gallery
Events: Same as portraits
Assorted: looks ok
Time lapse: video is tiny
Blog: gives an about me page? Looks like its in the wrong place
About me: duplicate stuff
Contact me: works fine
Social icons: they stand out but often disappear behind a loading text (using firefox)

There is maybe too many options for different styles of photography which may confuse users. You have 5 different galleries. Could you condense it? Some of your personal stuff like time lapse and street photography could be contained in your blog. Do you think customers will seek you out to take these kind of photos?

You need some kind of logo or header across the site rather than the plain text to make it more attractive too. If its portraits you are going to try to be selling your main customer base will probably be female so possibly adjust it with them in mind, what would attract them?

Hope this helps!
 
Hi Jordon, I get the impression this is a new website that you're keen to share but - as others have said above - it's not clear whether this is your business website and you're looking to attract clients, or a personal website to showcase your photographs. That should probably be made clearer on the About Me page.

I like the layout and you have some lovely images, but spelling is something I notice and there's a mistake in one of your main headings ('Potrait'), which is obviously going to show on every page, and a couple in your first blog entry (approipriate, breif ). The link in that blog entry ("my thread HERE on a popular photography forum") isn't working either, so it would probably be worth asking someone to proofread and cast a critical eye over it.

Also the Assorted Photography gallery seems huge compared to the others - perhaps some could be sorted into a couple of extra galleries to make it easier for people to view?

Hope that helps!
 
I'm not sure what the others mean about not being clear about being a photographer. Maybe you've worked on it lately, but it seems very clear to me that you want to be considered a photographer and will consider assignments. One caution I would make, however, is about the blog. If you're going to have a blog, it needs to be updated fairly regularly. There is a lot of info online about what makes a good blog, etc. so you might do a bit of reading. Also... and this is a big problem.... your blog is so full of spelling errors that it might put off anyone considering hiring you. Just sayin' . . . . Run a spell-check as a first step. That will help you identify the problems. Otherwise, good luck. Nice photos.
 
If you are British "traveling" is travelling" - unless you are from USA.
 
The text on the first page is too small and too close together making it hard to click on an iphone.

Also one of your photos in the portrait section isn't a portrait.
 
Also you have the following text on one section:

"A personal project that will make sense to those who know about me and may make an interesting set to those that dont."

It is self indulgent nonsense that will completely put off any potential clients.
 
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