weekly Severn Bore's 52 in 2014

HI Andrew

hope your eye's are all healed now & sight back to 100% (y)

Vertical....cracking shot ,sharp , good use of DOF & a fab pose from Eddie.....:clap:

Yum.....Jock's a handsome looking chap..... ,grass over his arm is niggling but not a lot you could do about that ( cloning would be a mare !) but can't help thinking it needs a little boost of something to make him really pop out from the bg ? Light looks quite harsh so maybe tone it down a smidge...possibly ?
 
I like it too Andrew, well captured just coming out of the shadows into the sunlight. It looks loud :cool: As mentioned by Paul, motioned blur on the wheels give the sense of plenty of movement (y)

:thinking: I suppose the only thing I could mention is that a little more room up front for it to move into would have been good :)
 
Phil-D said:
I like it too Andrew, well captured just coming out of the shadows into the sunlight. It looks loud :cool: As mentioned by Paul, motioned blur on the wheels give the sense of plenty of movement (y)
:thinking: I suppose the only thing I could mention is that a little more room up front for it to move into would have been good :)
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I agree with Phil good one :)
 
Hi, nicely caught pic looks a very loud engine
nice to see some motion in the wheels while the engine is sharp
 
Thanks for all of the kind comments on my LOUD entry.
Week 28 - Rich
A shot of my wife's delicious rich fruit cake. I had to grab a quick shot today before it was consumed!
52-Rich-7514.jpg by SevernBore, on Flickr
 
Rich: Oh yes, looks rich (and yummy) and I would very much like a piece please. Nicely lit and I like how you've used a clean knife. If I had to be ultra picky, I would clone out the crumbs along the front edge of the plate and the few specs at the back.

Good job Andrew!
 
Hi Jason,
Sorry. all gone! I take your point about the crumbs. I had intended to clone them out and then promptly forgot to do so!
Andrew
 
blondie606 said:
HI Andrew

hope your eye's are all healed now & sight back to 100% (y)

Vertical....cracking shot ,sharp , good use of DOF & a fab pose from Eddie.....:clap:

Yum.....Jock's a handsome looking chap..... ,grass over his arm is niggling but not a lot you could do about that ( cloning would be a mare !) but can't help thinking it needs a little boost of something to make him really pop out from the bg ? Light looks quite harsh so maybe tone it down a smidge...possibly ?
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Hi Lynne,
Thanks for the comments. I was remiss not to respond about your kind wishes re my cataract operation. Yes. all went well and I now have almost perfect unaided distance vision, but am now awaiting new specs for reading and close up. I have literally just broken my cheapo supermarket readers and can see little on my monitor at present, so apologies if any typos. Off to get seom cheap temporary replacements.
Andrew
 
Nice shot. Bang on theme and well executed. I might prefer a touch less DOF to really focus on the cake rather than the edges of the plate, but that's me and a comment on what I like, rather than any crit technically.

One minor crit though: I find the pattern of the worksurface to be a bit distracting - colour similarity to cake and pattern doesn't quite sit well for me.

But otherwise really good take.
 
Vertical - Well captured as it's nice and sharp plus what looks like quite harsh lighting has been handled well

Yummy - I really like the colours of the gooseberries but I always fascinated by such human features in gorillas. He looks a fantastic character

Loud - Spot on sharp and yet the blur of the wheels gives a great sense of motion.

Rich - That looks a super cake. Good composition and the whites have been held back enough to still be white without blowing out
 
Hi Andrew

glad the op went well & you now have replacement reading glasses...(y)

Loud....really like the sharpness ,focus & wheel blur in this (y)

Yum....lovely composition , great whites , plenty of texture in the cake & well exposed ...lovely shot :clap:

Skill...limited you say ?? I beg to differ...I struggle with matchstick men:D really well lit & perfect exposure (y) The only thing I'm struggling with is the composition.....the loose pencil doesn't work for me but I can't explain why ? The hand seems to be in an awkward position , I'd have expected it to be coming in from the lower half of the shot but again I'm struggling to pin point why ? I also feel a portrait version would sit better so the bottom of the artbook is at the bottom of the shot ?
Sorry if that all sounds negative , it's not meant to be as it's a genuinley great shot & show's another of your skills. Not being an arty person I may not understand the layout you chose for which I apologise

Hope I haven't offended :(
 
Hi Andrew.... I like the composition with the exception of the loose pencil...I think it makes it look a bit too 'posed' rather than an action shot. ..... but an excellent choice for the theme. I really like the pencil sketch and it certainly shows your skill.
 
blondie606 said:
Hi Andrew



Skill...limited you say ?? I beg to differ...I struggle with matchstick men:D really well lit & perfect exposure (y) The only thing I'm struggling with is the composition.....the loose pencil doesn't work for me but I can't explain why ? The hand seems to be in an awkward position , I'd have expected it to be coming in from the lower half of the shot but again I'm struggling to pin point why ? I also feel a portrait version would sit better so the bottom of the artbook is at the bottom of the shot ?
Sorry if that all sounds negative , it's not meant to be as it's a genuinley great shot & show's another of your skills. Not being an arty person I may not understand the layout you chose for which I apologise

Hope I haven't offended :(
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susiejb said:
Hi Andrew.... I like the composition with the exception of the loose pencil...I think it makes it look a bit too 'posed' rather than an action shot. ..... but an excellent choice for the theme. I really like the pencil sketch and it certainly shows your skill.
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Thanks for the comments and I entirely agree. I have uploaded a different version, hopefully addressing your constructive criticisms. And "No" Lynne, I am never offended by helpful comments.
TP52-Skill-One eyed man-7676a.jpg by SevernBore, on Flickr
 
Hi Andrew

You certainly have some skill there... I like the second, but the quirky angle of the first is very interesting and unusual... good shots. I also prefer the framing/composition of the first with no cut-off parts.

Half - well taken, but quite distracting behind and the main subject (minute hand) appears to be blurry from movement? Good idea and nice lighting though.
 
blondie606 said:
Loud....really like the sharpness ,focus & wheel blur in this (y)

Yum....lovely composition , great whites , plenty of texture in the cake & well exposed ...lovely shot :clap:

Skill .....the loose pencil doesn't work for me but I can't explain why ? The hand seems to be in an awkward position , I'd have expected it to be coming in from the lower half of the shot but again I'm struggling to pin point why ? I also feel a portrait version would sit better so the bottom of the artbook is at the bottom of the shot ?
Sorry if that all sounds negative , it's not meant to be as it's a genuinley great shot & show's another of your skills. Not being an arty person I may not understand the layout you chose for which I apologise
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:agree: ... yes I agree with all Lynne says here.

The One-Eyed Man is good too.

Half past ... clean & sharp ... and I like the angle.
 
HI Andrew


whew.....glad I didn't offend & I really love the 2nd version of Skill...feels & looks more natural to me :clap::clap:

Half....spot on with the timing to get exactly 1/2 past , bright sharp & probably the only angle you could get...still kinda jumps out of the screen at me (y)
 
Hi Andrew,
Rich... no chance of a re-shoot on that one then! afraid I disagree with Jason about the crumbs I would like to have seen a few between the cake and the slice and for the knife to look as though it has just cut the slice, personal preference (y)
Skill.... Wow!! Andrew great drawing The 2nd composition works best for me :clap::clap:
Half.. I agree with Lynne, lovely clock(y)
 
Skill, yes, very skilful indeed :clap:both are excellent drawings but as for the image I prefer the 2nd shot (y) changing the angle of the sketch pad, the arm coming in from the bottom, very good :)

Great clock, like the angle (y).........:thinking: I did wonder if it looked a little soft to me :)
 
Skill - very skilful indeed I can't draw to save my life I do however prefer the second image for the composition.

Half - fits the theme, and a great clock just feel it's a tiny bit tight in the frame.
 
Beautiful shot, Andrew. I think it's stronger for being slightly off centre, although perhaps would benefit from being ever so slightly more so (i.e. at a twisted angle with the gap in the hedge left and tower slightly right of centre?)

Exposure is spot on for me - ok, could be lifted a 1/3 stop or so if you're being ultra picky but the darker mood suits the sky, so just perfect as it is for me.

Verticals look good (as much as they ever will on a half timber building!) and focus is perfect.

On tiny crit is there's a good chunk of Chromatic Abberation, especially on the near left roof apex (cyan on top edge, magenta on right edge). Easily fixable though.

Quality picture! :clap:
 
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