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Hi all, I have just made a new website for my work now as the old one was years old and all my work was out of date ;) plus, it was too unfocussed.

I have the new one up now, but I would like some feedback on one of the stories I have just posted up online.

I am keen to know what you think, and whether or not you would click through to the links at the bottom of the article or not?

Any feedback is appreciated. :thumbs:

http://www.jamesoliverstone.co.uk/the-road-to-education/
 
I like the photos and the minimalist design, haven't read all the text, prefer it as a few pages rather than one long one, but I can understand why you went for one page instead. I never saw the previous version.
 
Is elegant and punchy. Don't mess with it! Yes I clicked through.
 
Enjoyed reading that, it kept my interest throughout. One thing I noticed is that you refer to her step father as being her father in law is that the correct way to describe him? :shrug:
 
Oops, apologies mods for putting this in the wrong forum ;)

Last_Straw said:
I like the photos and the minimalist design, haven't read all the text, prefer it as a few pages rather than one long one, but I can understand why you went for one page instead. I never saw the previous version.
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Funnily enough, I was going to split it into pages, but I ended thinking that it flowed better as a single page.

droj said:
Is elegant and punchy. Don't mess with it! Yes I clicked through.
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Thanks! :thumbs:

beyond the blue said:
Enjoyed reading that, it kept my interest throughout. One thing I noticed is that you refer to her step father as being her father in law is that the correct way to describe him? :shrug:
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Ah, thanks for noticing that, I shall edit that now :)

Thanks to you all for taking the time to read through, feedback is very useful :thumbs:
 
Looks clean, although I'm not a fan of the grey background on the about page - better off being white. Also, your images look very low res - are you uploading them to the size they should be, or are you leaving it to Wordpress to resize?
 
I skim-read the story and it looks very interesting. However it is difficult to read as the line lengths are too long:

http://baymard.com/blog/line-length-readability

Also the link at the bottom is very 'ugly':

http://www.plan-uk.org/what-we-do/campaigns/because-i-am-a-girl/get-involved/raise-your-hand/malala-day-campaigning-for-the-right-to-education?utm_source=Google&utm_medium=CPC&utm_term={keyword}&utm_content=generic&utm_campaign=Malala+Day+June+13#sthash.zVKO0JBa.dpuf

I would use this one instead which points to the same page and is much neater:
www.plan-uk.org/what-we-do/campaign...la-day-campaigning-for-the-right-to-education
 
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Jez2011 said:
I skim-read the story and it looks very interesting. However it is difficult to read as the line lengths are too long:

http://baymard.com/blog/line-length-readability

Also the link at the bottom is very 'ugly':

http://www.plan-uk.org/what-we-do/campaigns/because-i-am-a-girl/get-involved/raise-your-hand/malala-day-campaigning-for-the-right-to-education?utm_source=Google&utm_medium=CPC&utm_term={keyword}&utm_content=generic&utm_campaign=Malala+Day+June+13#sthash.zVKO0JBa.dpuf

I would use this one instead which points to the same page and is much neater:
www.plan-uk.org/what-we-do/campaign...la-day-campaigning-for-the-right-to-education
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Even better would be a short code button saying 'view campaign' or similar, which links to the required site.
 
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