Brand New Website

[pwynn-mackenzie]

So I published this website for myself about a week and half ago and have since made a few improvements/changes following some great feedback:

Just wondering what you guys make of the finished site:
http://www.paulwynn-mackenzie.co.uk

Any C+C welcome!

Thanks a lot

 

[nigpd]

As the saying goes, you only have one chance to make a first impression, so...........

The script at the bottom of your front page needs some work. The grammar and hence flow of the prose can be improved IMHO

Currently, it reads

"I'm Landscape Photographer primarily living in the beautiful county of North Dorset who loves to capture the unique beauty of mother nature on this stunning planet. While my primary location is in Dorset I'm in a unique opportunity to spend a lot of time in city of Plymouth which is surrounded by the famous Dartmoor national park and a truly varied and striking coast line."

It would read better as

"I'm a landscape photographer living primarily in the beautiful county of North Dorset and who loves to capture the unique beauty of mother nature on this stunning planet. While my primary location is in Dorset, I have the unique opportunity to spend a lot of time in the city of Plymouth, surrounded both by the famous Dartmoor national park and by a truly varied and striking coast line."

You need to get someone else to proof read what you have written, because you can get blind to it if working on the script for a long period.

Just my initial thoughts

 

[pwynn-mackenzie]

Thanks a lot Nigel

I have made the changes now that you described. Truth be told I have changed the opening multiple times following various comments from other people. Still not a 100% sure about:
"I'm a landscape photographer living primarily in the beautiful county of North Dorset and who loves to capture the unique beauty of mother nature on this stunning planet." Whether that should be 'and' or not, none the less I have put it like that for the time being.

 

[nigpd]

You could always go with

"I'm a landscape photographer living primarily in the beautiful county of North Dorset. I love to capture the unique beauty of mother nature on this stunning planet."

 

[Treesie]

Getting there, you also need a bit of proof reading on your profile and blog pages.

 

[Jez2011]

Missing an 'a' between 'am' and 'self' here:

I am self taught Landscape photographer based primarily in Dorset, however due to currently studying Computer Science at Plymouth University I also spend a large amount of time living on the South coast of Devon.

Also text/background contrast is a bit on the low side:

http://contrastrebellion.com/

 

[Photodiva]

Hi. Paul. Text is a bit small, and nav resized oddly when made bigger. Make it stretch across the width a bit more, keep it all on one line, perhaps?

 

[pwynn-mackenzie]

Missing an 'a' between 'am' and 'self' here:



Also text/background contrast is a bit on the low side:

http://contrastrebellion.com/

Thanks I'll take a look at the a and am bit. Seems proof reading is needed to be done better! Had a couple of friends read over but nothing was noted. Not sure about the contrast bit though...

Getting there, you also need a bit of proof reading on your profile and blog pages.

Yep, I agree! Thanks

Hi. Paul. Text is a bit small, and nav resized oddly when made bigger. Make it stretch across the width a bit more, keep it all on one line, perhaps?

Hmmm the nav resizing is odd, I have viewed on a few different screens, but I haven't tried a really high res 24/27inch screen or anything. Don't know anyone who has one, but I should be getting one for my 21st in a couple of months

The text size is something I have looked and increased once after it was def to small, not sure about it at the moment.

You could always go with

"I'm a landscape photographer living primarily in the beautiful county of North Dorset. I love to capture the unique beauty of mother nature on this stunning planet."

Yeah good point, thanks!

 

[kestral]

Which software was used to build it?

 

[simonkit]

Hi Paul,

I think on the whole it works well, not too much text..although I do think that it is a bit small, nice selection of images, loads quickly and has easy navigation.

One suggestion, maybe a slightly larger version of the photo on the front page just to give first impressions that touch more impact?

Simon