Short story from today

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Hi all,

Didn't know where else to put this, but i filmed this for the last day of 6th form college, it's just a short story on the day and how it usually is.

If you could watch then it'd be much appreciated, and tips to improve would be great!

HD is better of course on vimeo, link is below..

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Thanks everyone!

Tom
 
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Pretty good Tom.

Some nice edits, nice shots (love some of the focus shift shots) and there was definitely a story told :)

Was the wide angle distortion deliberate? You used it in the first section.
 
It wasn't deliberate no :/

Thanks! I've just filmed a skate jam today, i'll post it up tomorrow!
 
well done for putting something together

I didn't like the way the audio kept chopping in and out, maybe if you picked a level that could work with the ambient sounds it would have been better?

Also you do a lot of panning, and whilst it ins't choppy and shaky it's still quite distracting.
 
Ah I had to, I don't have an external mic so to pick up different sounds in the noisy area of a school was hard without dimming the audio.
 
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